# Critique coming soon page - sleek20 **URL:** \ **Category:** Uncategorized\ **Created:** [April 14, 2006, 4:35pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-coming-soon-page-sleek20/185606 "2006-04-14T16:35:12Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 6\ **Page:** 1
**Author:** ![sleek20](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/b5ac83/32.png) [@sleek20](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/sleek20)\ **Post date:** [April 14, 2006, 4:35pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-coming-soon-page-sleek20/185606/1 "2006-04-14T16:35:12Z")
hello, I wanted you guys to take a look at my coming soon page. I am starting up a website and just wanted something for people to look at until I get my site up. It’s not much, just let me know what you guys think. thanks in advance, sleek [www.simonlacey.net](http://www.simonlacey.net) ---
**Author:** ![DDD](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/9fc348/32.png) [@DDD](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/DDD)\ **Post date:** [April 14, 2006, 4:58pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-coming-soon-page-sleek20/185606/2 "2006-04-14T16:58:16Z")
ok a few things. That looks like an ayato tutorial. I fyou do a tut at least switch it up a bit. Also the effect is cool but you cant read what it says. I wouldnt put it in a player interface. Just export it as a .flv from AE and use it in flash that way. Maybe add a little sound. All in all it is okay, but we as designers have seen that effect before so it is not too thrilling. ---
**Author:** ![sleek20](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/b5ac83/32.png) [@sleek20](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/sleek20)\ **Post date:** [April 14, 2006, 5:03pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-coming-soon-page-sleek20/185606/3 "2006-04-14T17:03:53Z")
ddd, yes it is an ayatoweb tut. good catch, but it is just a temp page until I work on my site and get it done. I thought by changing the name to [simonlacey.net](http://simonlacey.net) it would be enough to pass as changed. I used flash 8 to export the movie and it is in a player. I have tested it in firefox and ie and saw the player in botI thought about adding sound, but like I said it is a very temp page so I would rather work on my site than spend time on something I am going to trash in a few days/weeks. anyways I appreciate your critique, do you have any suggestions on what I can do graphically to make the animation my own? thanks, sleek ---
**Author:** ![DDD](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/9fc348/32.png) [@DDD](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/DDD)\ **Post date:** [April 14, 2006, 5:08pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-coming-soon-page-sleek20/185606/4 "2006-04-14T17:08:35Z")
maybe add some shimmer or some kind of scaling or 3d camera to it. Also you can try skinning the player too to make it a little more exciting. Seems weird to have a player for a 5 sec clip. Just dont stick to the tut so much. Most clients wont know but we will …:pa: ---
**Author:** ![sleek20](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/b5ac83/32.png) [@sleek20](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/sleek20)\ **Post date:** [April 14, 2006, 5:13pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-coming-soon-page-sleek20/185606/5 "2006-04-14T17:13:43Z")
good ideas. I actually tried the 3d camera tutorial on aya last night… results were piss poor but I can add the 3d camera to stroke and get something more mine. thanks man, appreciate it. ---
**Author:** ![DDD](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/9fc348/32.png) [@DDD](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/DDD)\ **Post date:** [April 14, 2006, 5:15pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-coming-soon-page-sleek20/185606/6 "2006-04-14T17:15:50Z")
also when it stops you see mothing but the beginning of the effect. Have it stop on a frame where you see everything or add to the scene where you can see the name at the end.