# Critique on illustration pliz
**URL:** https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757
**Category:** Uncategorized
**Created:** [March 21, 2006, 8:25am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757 "2006-03-21T08:25:16Z")
**Posts on this page:** 16
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### Author:  [@SelectionTool](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/SelectionTool)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 8:25am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/1 "2006-03-21T08:25:16Z")
Did a bit of dabbling with illustrator.I have an unfinished project I would like comments on.I would like especially to get critique on the main figure .Never went to art school or anything so pliz forgive me if the background is a bit \*\*\*\*y
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### Author:  [@Joppe](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/Joppe)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 9:00am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/2 "2006-03-21T09:00:17Z")
I like it overall, but there is something wrong with her face she seems to have a one centimetre neck. And her mouth is way too big. Other then that good work 🙂
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### Author:  [@hybrid101](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/hybrid101)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 10:46am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/3 "2006-03-21T10:46:41Z")
mouth looks bigger than normal…and the shading still makes it a bit flat. the blacks make the pic more 2d-ish. add a bit more grays:)
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### Author:  [@SelectionTool](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/SelectionTool)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 11:28am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/4 "2006-03-21T11:28:13Z")
thanks guys , am learning as I go.Will carryout adjustments
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### Author:  [@SelectionTool](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/SelectionTool)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 12:22pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/5 "2006-03-21T12:22:22Z")
this is just a rough before I clean up and add detail.Any better???
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### Author:  [@Pixeladdict](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/Pixeladdict)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 12:49pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/6 "2006-03-21T12:49:15Z")
> [@SelectionTool](#):
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> this is just a rough before I clean up and add detail.Any better???
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> 
Personally? No.
The first version is better then this one.
I think you just need to make the mouth smile more in the 1st version and perhaps make the face thinner?
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### Author:  [@SelectionTool](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/SelectionTool)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 1:00pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/7 "2006-03-21T13:00:54Z")
back to square one ;( 🅰 :crying: :crying:
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### Author:  [@this](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/this)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 1:33pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/8 "2006-03-21T13:33:31Z")
NICE JOB!
☹ what best program use to create illustration ?
adobe illustrator ? photoshop ? i m noob w/ this but luv.
😃
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### Author:  [@danielson](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/danielson)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 2:05pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/9 "2006-03-21T14:05:29Z")
I’d stick with the first one and add some subtle highlights to the arms so they stand out from her body a bit.
The face needs loads of work; her teeth are way too big and her lips need defining a bit more. The nose could do with some shadows/highlights too, just to give it some depth and perhaps add some colour and detail to the eyes?
Good start though!
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### Author:  [@SelectionTool](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/SelectionTool)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 6:10pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/10 "2006-03-21T18:10:47Z")
I think I should have put in a bit more work, kinda did it in less than 3 hrs I think so I guess its more of a scribble than a fully fledged drawing , but I will take your advice onboard
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### Author:  [@ritual](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/ritual)
#### Post date: [March 21, 2006, 9:05pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/11 "2006-03-21T21:05:40Z")
The first version is better becuase the stripes are too vibrant, I really like the background, it goes well with the whole piece.
The top of the eyes are too thick and the left elbow seems disconnected.
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### Author:  [@daleth](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/daleth)
#### Post date: [March 23, 2006, 5:37am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/12 "2006-03-23T05:37:08Z")
stripes could be good, just taken way way down! Shadows and highlights would be great. One thing I noticed is that the butterflies blend in to the background too easily, what if they were a different color or lightness?
Awesome!
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### Author:  [@theflash](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/theflash)
#### Post date: [March 23, 2006, 8:47am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/13 "2006-03-23T08:47:58Z")
eyes need to be worked on… the upper part esp…
also give some shading to the bottom of the nose…
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### Author:  [@SelectionTool](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/SelectionTool)
#### Post date: [March 23, 2006, 9:16am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/14 "2006-03-23T09:16:26Z")
am working on it right now started from scratch :hitman:
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### Author:  [@musicwithcolors](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/musicwithcolors)
#### Post date: [March 23, 2006, 9:20am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/15 "2006-03-23T09:20:30Z")
she just looks like she had a few too many donuts. you might want to reduce the other elements too (lines, butterflies, circles). other than that great job, if you are only starting.
> [@\_this](#):
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> NICE JOB!
>
> ☹ what best program use to create illustration ?
> adobe illustrator ? photoshop ? i m noob w/ this but luv.
> 😃
for illustrations anything from pen & paper to ps. if you are talking about vector art(?) you’d probably be best off with Adobe Illustrator.
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### Author:  [@SelectionTool](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/SelectionTool)
#### Post date: [March 23, 2006, 2:15pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/critique-on-illustration-pliz/182757/16 "2006-03-23T14:15:25Z")
just started yeah, first attempt at using any vector program other than flash