# Illustration critique **URL:** \ **Category:** design\ **Created:** [April 19, 2006, 2:20pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153 "2006-04-19T14:20:25Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 16\ **Page:** 1
**Author:** ![dravalanche](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/8797f3/32.png) [@dravalanche](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/dravalanche)\ **Post date:** [April 19, 2006, 2:20pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/1 "2006-04-19T14:20:25Z")
This is something I made up couple of months ago. The hand needs a bit of re-working. What do you think? ![](http://img89.imageshack.us/img89/6155/walkawaypic6rs.jpg) ---
**Author:** ![Joppe](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/j/b38774/32.png) [@Joppe](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/Joppe)\ **Post date:** [April 19, 2006, 2:43pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/2 "2006-04-19T14:43:08Z")
Where is the image? ---
**Author:** ![ApixDesigns](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/a/a88e57/32.png) [@ApixDesigns](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/ApixDesigns)\ **Post date:** [April 19, 2006, 8:33pm UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/3 "2006-04-19T20:33:12Z")
yeah looks pretty bland…:krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: ---
**Author:** ![dravalanche](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/8797f3/32.png) [@dravalanche](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/dravalanche)\ **Post date:** [April 20, 2006, 1:32am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/4 "2006-04-20T01:32:39Z")
> [@ApixDesigns](#): > > yeah looks pretty bland…:krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: :krazy: Thanks for the indepth critique. But your overuse of emoticons was appreciated. ---
**Author:** ![anon1712571](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/a/9dc877/32.png) [@anon1712571](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/anon1712571)\ **Post date:** [April 20, 2006, 1:40am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/5 "2006-04-20T01:40:14Z")
Well it looks quite flat- the linework doesnt define the shape as well as it should 🙂 ---
**Author:** ![dravalanche](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/8797f3/32.png) [@dravalanche](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/dravalanche)\ **Post date:** [April 20, 2006, 4:46am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/6 "2006-04-20T04:46:48Z")
> [@darkmotion](#): > > Well it looks quite flat- the linework doesnt define the shape as well as it should 🙂 Could you offer some suggestions please.:} ---
**Author:** ![anon1712571](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/a/9dc877/32.png) [@anon1712571](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/anon1712571)\ **Post date:** [April 20, 2006, 5:05am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/7 "2006-04-20T05:05:55Z")
try some cell shading and make the outer line of the character black 😃 ---
**Author:** ![hybrid101](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/h/7993a0/32.png) [@hybrid101](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/hybrid101)\ **Post date:** [April 20, 2006, 5:43am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/8 "2006-04-20T05:43:30Z")
shadows and highlights:) ---
**Author:** ![DDD](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/9fc348/32.png) [@DDD](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/DDD)\ **Post date:** [April 20, 2006, 5:46am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/9 "2006-04-20T05:46:44Z")
varying stroke widths as well. Not a bad start but it needs massaging ---
**Author:** ![dravalanche](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/8797f3/32.png) [@dravalanche](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/dravalanche)\ **Post date:** [April 20, 2006, 7:06am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/10 "2006-04-20T07:06:36Z")
Yeah, I think I need to thicken and round the lines a bit. They look a tad too sharp. There does need to be some more shades and lighting on it. What did you exactly mean by cell shade? ( I feel dumb by asking this question) ---
**Author:** ![SelectionTool](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/ac8455/32.png) [@SelectionTool](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/SelectionTool)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2006, 9:24am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/11 "2006-04-21T09:24:50Z")
kindaq flat, no shadows or gradients ---
**Author:** ![Phenex](https://yyz1.discourse-cdn.com/flex011/user_avatar/forum.kirupa.com/phenex/32/686_2.png) [@Phenex](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/Phenex)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2006, 9:34am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/12 "2006-04-21T09:34:33Z")
Stroke weights and more detailing… Well actually a lot more detailing… Especially near the stomach and around the head… Give appropriately detailed highlights to the fins as well. The pre-sketch is very proportionate though, except for that hand 😛 :lol: ---
**Author:** ![anon1712571](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/a/9dc877/32.png) [@anon1712571](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/anon1712571)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2006, 9:40am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/13 "2006-04-21T09:40:10Z")
Cell shading is like shading with solids ---
**Author:** ![Phenex](https://yyz1.discourse-cdn.com/flex011/user_avatar/forum.kirupa.com/phenex/32/686_2.png) [@Phenex](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/Phenex)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2006, 9:42am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/14 "2006-04-21T09:42:04Z")
Hmmm… What is shading with liquids and gases called? ---
**Author:** ![dravalanche](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/8797f3/32.png) [@dravalanche](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/dravalanche)\ **Post date:** [April 22, 2006, 4:23am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/15 "2006-04-22T04:23:30Z")
> [@thelonephoenix](#): > > Stroke weights and more detailing… Well actually a lot more detailing… Especially near the stomach and around the head… Give appropriately detailed highlights to the fins as well. > > The pre-sketch is very proportionate though, except for that hand 😛 :lol: why must you laugh at me. ---
**Author:** ![hybrid101](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/h/7993a0/32.png) [@hybrid101](https://forum.kirupa.com/u/hybrid101)\ **Post date:** [April 22, 2006, 4:54am UTC](https://forum.kirupa.com/t/illustration-critique/186153/16 "2006-04-22T04:54:13Z")
[Cell Shading:)](http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cell_shading)